The recorder dude with UR-Didact; you say he was a warrior servant rate and later a miner rate.
I read most sci fi books. What I like is there is not too much dialog in your books and it gives me the sense that I might find a lost treasure somehow. It's an odd feeling but made me miss bus stops reading the latest book. Clearly you didn't try much on this book but I think that just made it better. One of the best books I have ever read when rating bias to escapism.
Japanese like the sensation that characters increase in "power". This is what you miss. Watch the entire dragon ball series until you understand. You will think it's silly but after a certain amount of hours you will understand that it is indeed not. However, that is not the demographic that critics your story, I admit.
From: Greg Bear
Thanks, RJ! Oh, we tried... You don't miss bus stops without considerable effort being expended. As for Japanese power sequences, daughter Alex is taking us through KILL LA KILL now, which demonstrates your observation in spades.